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| Inu no Taishō | Jun 29 2009, 07:30 PM Post #16 |
 
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chapter 14:inu daiyōkai vs oozaru! at dende's lookout goku & inu no tashiou are training to tap into their beast forms willing goku:hey inu no tashiou you never told me that you were a(n) inu daiyōkai inu no tashiou:how could you not notice that i was one goku:well i didn't see any fangs or a tail inu no tashiou:i can hide those goku:really inu no tashiou:have you ever wondered what it be like if a(n) inu daiyōkai fought with a(n) oozaru goku:yea i've always thought of that inu no tashiou:well lets make that happen goku:allright inu no tashiou:best out of 6 wins goku:well then get ready to lose inu no tashiou:i don't think that will be happening suddenly vegeta barges in & starts getting cocky saying that he'll beat both of them then vegeta:i'll beat both of you in 10 seconds goku/inu no tashiou:you got me confused with someone else vegeta:you think you're so tough cause you're a(n) inu daiyōkai inu no tashiou:i'm the last of them goku:how bout we do this inu no tashiou:do what goku:you fight vegeta 2x then i fight vegeta 2x then it's gonna be a three way fight for the last 2x inu no tashiou:sounds good to me vegeta:hope you're ready to get imbarrassed inu daiyōkai cause i'm not going easy inu no tashiou:aw shut the hell up brat vegeta:that's it i'll make sure that you get 12 injuries inu no tashiou:yea right goku knocks vegeta & inu no tashiou out & then makes a artifical moon to make them both transform! 3 minutes later inu daiyōkai was fighting oozaru vegeta! goku:ready oozaru vegeta:hahahahahaha you're gonna get it inu daiyōkai inu no tashiou:i'll make that you don't say anything after this goku:set oozaru vegeta:whole lot of talk comming from a giant dog inu no tashiou:i was gonna say the same thing about you monkey goku:go the fight begins & oozaru vegeta starts out by using final flash oozaru vegeta:final flash inu no tashiou:pathetic oozaru vegeta:don't run dog inu no tashiou:who said i was running away from you inu no tashiou:wolf flash blast oozaru vegeta:what the hell was that inu no tashiou:my foot in your mouth oozaru vegeta:gwah...fool oozaru vegeta bites down on inu no tashiou foot & tries to cause an injury inu no tashiou:aaahhhh...you punk oozaru vegeta:hahahahaha inu no tashiou:bite this oozaru vegeta:aarrrggghhh goku:& now everybody inu no tashiou has scared vegeta 2x what's gonna happen now find put yourself oozaru vegeta:when i'm done with inu no tashiou kakarot your gonna be in a world of hurt inu no tashiou:nuff talk inu no tashiou:ka-me-ha-me-hhaaaa oozaru vegeta:what the inu no tashiou's kamehameha wave hits oozaru vegeta right in the chest then goku:well inu no tashiou has made vegeta stumble with a kamehameha wave & buried him in the dust inu no tashiou:goku you're a clown goku:i know vegeta tells me all the time suddenly as inu no tashiou starts walking away oozaru vegeta jumps up & slams inu no tashiou oozaru vegeta:what happend dog you were just acting tough a minute ago inu no tashiou:aaaaahhhhhh......cheap ***** bastard oozaru vegeta:& why did you say that knowing you're gonna lose inu no tashiou:cause you fell into my trap oozaru vegeta:a trap inu no tashiou:& you're supposed to have hightened senses goku:man this great inu no tashiou/oozaru vegeta:kakarot you clown goku:what i do now inu no tashiou/oozaru vegeta:act retarted goku:figures you say something like that inu no tashiou:now eat this oozaru vegeta:oh man i'm in trouble inu no tashiou:big bang wolf fang blast oozaru vegeta:aaaahhhhhhhhh to act more stupid goku then plays headstrong to make the fight better inu no tashiou:looks like their's no need for a round 2 don't you think goku:i'd have to say yea inu no tashiou:so how bout that match goku:lets go oozaru vegeta then tries to attack inu no tashiou before him & goku fight but is sent flying by inu no tashiou's tail inu no tashiou/goku:that looked like it hurt inu no tashiou:i think it did oozaru vegeta:ouch inu no tashiou then makes a false moon to make goku transform & the second inu daiyōkai vs oozau match is under way oozaru goku:hope you're ready cause i'm not backing down inu daiyōkai:good cause i have no intention of backing down either oozaru goku/inu daiyōkai:allright let go! oozaru goku starts off by shooting ki blasts out from his mouth creating smoke inu daiyōkai:don't do what vegeta did oozaru goku:oh won't inu daiyōkai:now get ready oozaru goku:ready for what inu daiyōkai:this....wolf slash blast inu daiyōkai:here's johnny oozaru goku:take this oozaru goku throws inu daiyōkai across the room of time & spirit! as the inu daiyōkai gets up & charges at oozaru goku,oozaru vegeta attacks both the inu daiyōkai & oozaru vegeta oozaru vegeta:hahahahaha.....i win inu daiyōkai/oozaru goku:no you lose oozaru vegeta:what the inu daiyōkai/oozaru goku:eat this oozaru goku & the inu daiyōkai slam & throw oozaru vegeta to the farthest side of the room of spirit & time & call the match a draw cause of vegeta interference! but little do our heroes know their 7 days away from a(n) all out war! what will be the casualties? find out as it happens! |
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| Inu no Taishō | Jun 29 2009, 07:30 PM Post #17 |
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chapter 15:anew inu daiyōkai appears as inu no tashiou is up on a roof in the city & notices a shooting star inu no tashiou:huh....strange there's never shooting stars around this area i'll go check it out inu no tashiou travels to where the shooting star fell & gets a surprise as the smoke clears inu no tashiou:wait this isn't a shooting star! it's a saiyan spaceship! inu no tashiou:looks like somebody's inside inu no tashiou prepares to open the spaceship & then ???:ugh....who are you? & how did i get here? inu no tashiou:all you need to know is that i'm a(n) inu daiyōkai!...who are you? amaterasu:i'm amaterasu! inu no tashiou:well welcome to earth! amaterasu:how did i get here? inu no tashiou:i don't know! amaterasu:you said that you were a(n) inu daiyōkai inu no tashiou:i am! i'm the last one left amaterasu:really inu no tashiou:yeah my home planet was destroyed by a feind amaterasu:that's ashame inu no tashiou:yeah i know inu no tashiou & amaterasu get out of woods & travel back to inu no tashiou's place inu no tashiou:so are you a saiyan or something else amaterasu:something else or a different race inu no tashiou:what exactly amaterasu:you'll find out soon enough inu no tashiou:i don't like the sound of that one day's pass & inu no tashiou sense's a(n) strange new power inu no tashiou:what's this power....it seems familiar inu no tashiou travels to the room of time & spirit to find this new power dende:ah hello inu no tashiou you've been gone a long time inu no tashiou:hello to you to dende...has anybody came here lately dende:yeah a female...she said she was a(n) inu no tashiou:a(n) what dende:what race of saiyan are you inu no tashiou:inu daiyōkai why dende:go inside & see inu no tashiou:what are you hiding dende:go find out inu no tashiou goes inside of the room of time & spirit & finds something interesting amaterasu:so you've finally woke up sleepy head inu no tashiou:what the...when did you get here amaterasu:bout 30 minutes before you inu no tashiou:oh great amaterasu:hey wanna see something interesting inu no tashiou:yeah what is it? amaterasu:create a false moon & see! inu no tashiou creates a false moon & amaterasu starts to transform inu no tashiou:what the...you're a(n) inu daiyōkai? amaterasu:how did you not notice when you found me? inu no tashiou:cause you didn't have a tail! amaterasu:did you forget that we can hide our tails? inu no tashiou:oh yeah i did! amaterasu:wow you're a clown inu no tashiou:great she calls me a clown amaterasu:wanna have a(n) inu daiyōkai vs inu daiyōkai match inu no tashiou:yeah lets go amaterasu & inu no tashiou gets ready for a inu daiyōkai vs inu daiyōkai match as they get ready vegeta:aw great the 2 dogs are gonna fight!.....wait 2 dogs? inu daiyōkai amaterasu:wow you sure are stupid inu daiyōkai inu no tashiou:what do you think i say every time i see him? vegeta:this fight won't begin without me! inu daiyōkai inu no tashiou:didn't you learn anything from the last fight? inu daiyōkai amaterasu:what happened the last time? inu daiyōkai inu no tashiou:something that he won't forget vegeta:that's enough!....lets fight vegeta's temper starts to rise & then he starts to transform into a(n) oozaru at will oozaru vegeta:allright stupid dogs who's first inu daiyōkai inu no tashiou:me chump oozaru vegeta:this will only take 10 seconds inu daiyōkai inu no tashiou:yeah for you oozaru vegeta:what does that mean? inu daiyōkai inu no tashiou:find out now inu daiyōkai inu no tashiou & oozaru vegeta start to fight! oozaru vegeta goes in for a cheap shot but is blasted away by a kamehameha wave from inu daiyōkai inu no tashiou oozaru vegeta:ahhhh inu daiyōkai inu no tashiou:that was only 4 inu daiyōkai amaterasu:ready inu daiyōkai inu no tashiou:you bet i am the inu daiyōkai vs inu daiyōkai match is starting & this is one that inu no tashiou & amaterasu won't forget inu daiyōkai inu no tashiou:let's go inu daiyōkai amaterasu:allright amaterasu starts out by using her full powered energy wave attack inu daiyōkai amaterasu:full powered energy wave inu daiyōkai inu no tashiou:kamehameha the 2 blast collide & a(n) beam struggle starts to happen inu daiyōkai inu no tashiou:i'm not losing this! inu daiyōkai amaterasu:neither am i! as inu daiyōkai amaterasu was about to win the beam struggle oozaru vegeta sneaks inu daiyōkai inu no tashiou & slams him! oozaru vegeta:ahhahahahahaha...i told you i can beat you stupid dog! inu daiyōkai amaterasu:ahhhh....dog flash blast! inu daiyōkai inu no tashiou:wolf slash attack! oozaru vegeta:rraagghhh.....damn dogs! the 2 inu daiyōkai's deform back into their human appearences! cause of the interference from vegeta the match is called a draw! but little do our inu daiyōkai's know that their getting ready for a war,which will be real sever! who will survive find out next time! |
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| Inu no Taishō | Jun 29 2009, 07:33 PM Post #18 |
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chapter 16:the war draws near somewhere in the mountians at night time inu no tashiou:it's been almost 2 months since i been of this planet & reached ssj4 goku:ah what are spazzing about brother we'll reach the next level of super saiyan nuwa:he's right i say we'll all reach the next level of super saiyan in about 3 days onamuji:ah no matter we are saiyans aren't we inu no tashiou:yeah i hope you're right goten:why are so down uncle gohan:yeah it's gonna be allright amaterasu:don't be so sure trunks:what do mean amaterasu:just watch yourselves goku:ok we will the next day onamuji:huh...what's that trunks:what are you talking about onamuji:look goten:what are those gohan:they look like saiyan spaceships nuwa:i'll go get inu no tashiou vegeta:why do we need that stupid dog nuwa:cause he's one of the last remaining inu daiyôkai's vegeta:you act like he's a king amaterasu/nuwa:compared to you he is one vegeta:aw shut up & get the damn dog allready as nuwa travels to go awake inu no tashiou she stumbles on an interesting find nuwa:what the these are saiyan spaceships & there's people inside of them nuwa:ah i'm getting off track i should be going to go get inu no tashiou ???:you aren't going anywhere nuwa:ah..who's...who's there ???:someone you need to fear ???:& someone who's gonna wipe out the last 2 inu daiyôkai's nuwa:you bastards ???:is the little female saiyan angry nuwa:get away from me ???:now die nuwa:ugh nuwa:who are you tsukuyomi:my name's tsukuyomi inu no tashiou awakens to the faint energy of nuwa & the new presences of unfamiliar energy inu no tashiou:gwah what's this?...nuwa's energy just went blank...i gotta check it out inu no tashiou teleports to the woods where nuwa is & doesn't like what he sees inu no tashiou:what the nuwa? nuwa:inu no tashiou! inu no tashiou:yes it's me! what happened? nuwa:he said he was a saiyan & was going to destroy the rest of the inu daiyôkai's inu no tashiou:what is his name nuwa:his name is inu no tashiou:yea nuwa:his name is tsukuyomi inu no tashiou:tsukuyomi that bastard nuwa:you know him inu no tashiou:no but i want to kill him after learning of tsukuyomi's arrival on earth inu no tashiou rushes to the others goku:ah there you are nuwa just went to get you inu no tashiou:that's the thing vegeta:what happened to her inu no tashiou:she said she was ambushed by rouge saiyans wanting to kill me gohan:this...this is bad goten:where is nuwa inu no tashiou:she's in the woods regaining her energy onamuji:good i'll get her vegeta:& i'll go find the ones responsible for this everyone:what...this is a change inu no tashiou:onamuji,nuwa said the one responsible for this is tsukuyomi onamuji:good i'll be sure to kill him onamuji teleports to the wooded area where nuwa is to recover her onamuji:nuwa what the hell happened nuwa:they ambushed me onamuji:who? who ambushed you nuwa:aliens....& they had 4 saiyans with them onamuji:here go home & rest nuwa:allright onamuji teleports nuwa to her & krillin's house undetected onamuji:nuwa rest now i'll find those bastards nuwa:be careful onamuji:i will....& now to find the bastards responsible for this onamuji then teleports to where inu no tashiou is & they go & search for nuwa attackers inu no tashiou:so you're finally here onamuji:where are they inu no tashiou:i don't know! i was just on their onamuji:good lets track them down inu no tashiou:i go left you go right onamuji:this ain't rush hour inu no tashiou:shut up & go right onamuji:allright allright inu no tashiou & onamuji split up & seacrh for nuwa's attackers inu no tashiou:now if i attacked a female saiyan & ran where would i be tsukuyomi:i'm right here inu no tashiou:i suppose you're tsukuyomi tsukuyomi:yes & i suppose you're the legendary inu no tashiou inu no tashiou:i don't know about being a legend but yea i'm him tsukuyomi:well then you'll have no problem telling me why you left us to die inu no tashiou:what are you talking about tsukuyomi tsukuyomi:you left the oozaru nightraders to die inu no tashiou:i don't know nothing about the nightraders & tell me what you did to nuwa tsukuyomi:lies....as for your female saiyan friend i just put her in a state of shock inu no tashiou:then you'll have no problems dieing tsukuyomi tsukuyomi:you..haha...you believe you can kill me.....hahahahahahahha inu no tashiou:now die tsukuyomi:gwah...what the....oozaru flare a giant oozaru appears & blinds inu no tashiou so tsukuyomi can ecsape onamuji:now to find the bastards who tried to kill my sister ???:hahahahaha onamuji"who's...who's there ???:hahahahaha onamuji:anwser me ???:aw don't tell me you've forgotten about me 17 onamuji:it..it can't be ???:oh it be..it be onamuji:dr..dr gero dr gero:dun dun dun dun....that's right onamuji:how'd you survive dr gero:that's another story for another time dr gero:but for now inu no tashiou:here dr gero:what inu no tashiou's blast hit the doctor & a big smokescreen appears inu no tashiou:lets get out of here onamuji:yea lets onamuji & inu no tashiou escape & return to everyone to tell them what happened & that they're at war! what will happen find out next time! |
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| BattleMetal | Jun 29 2009, 07:45 PM Post #19 |
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Curious but do you post these chapters on the spot or type them up at home then post them in. Have you been working on this for a while? Loads of work done here |
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http://dbzf.co.uk/topic/8040430/1/ Link to my DBZ fan-fic tale: Saiyans, Frieza, the Ginyu Force and other alien races and beings all chucked into the soup-pot for all out action and glory! http://dbzf.co.uk/topic/8129945/1/#new Link to a DBZ inspired story/ battle scenario that i did when i was 16 http://dbzf.co.uk/topic/8071554/1/#new Link to the Marvel/DC tale of the super-powered hereos and villians of both verses. Biggest heavy-hitters square off in an almight-free-for-all brawl! | |
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| Inu no Taishō | Jun 29 2009, 08:03 PM Post #20 |
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dude this is my 2nd original fan-fic. this is old as of January of 09! I posted this to see if any people would come around & give good criticism for my efforts,but seeing as though no-one else has visited this thread & you can't give any good reviews my thoughts of sending this to Akira Toriyama & Funimation are shot. |
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| * Psyam | Jun 29 2009, 08:11 PM Post #21 |
 
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There's a lot of content here, and you have a lot of ideas, that's good. I'd suggest you work on improving your writing skills, though. The first thing you should work on is using punctuation and grammar for your story, it might not seem like that much of a difference, but many people will just not read it if it has none because they will assume that if you can't be bothered to make your writing presentable, it's not worth reading. It also looks messy if you don't use proper punctuation, which will again put readers off. Also, try using less dialogue and more description. Doing that mixes your writing up a bit, and makes it more interesting to read. You should describe what characters and places look like. Pure dialogue will put readers off. I'm no expert on writing fan-fics, but that's my thoughts. Edited by Psyam, Jun 29 2009, 08:13 PM.
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| BattleMetal | Jun 29 2009, 08:26 PM Post #22 |
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Hey man, I like your ideas youve loads of them and really have turned things upside down. It just as Pysam said you need to work on how you put it across. when i made my first comment i didnt expect you to post so many other chapters. I want to read more but you need to work on less dialogue and more description. Im used to reading your style now anyway and ive got a good imagination so i can picture whats going on and can see the characters. It just you need to fill in some of those holes with some colour and depth. Just learn from it mate. We all do. |
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http://dbzf.co.uk/topic/8040430/1/ Link to my DBZ fan-fic tale: Saiyans, Frieza, the Ginyu Force and other alien races and beings all chucked into the soup-pot for all out action and glory! http://dbzf.co.uk/topic/8129945/1/#new Link to a DBZ inspired story/ battle scenario that i did when i was 16 http://dbzf.co.uk/topic/8071554/1/#new Link to the Marvel/DC tale of the super-powered hereos and villians of both verses. Biggest heavy-hitters square off in an almight-free-for-all brawl! | |
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| Inu no Taishō | Jun 29 2009, 08:42 PM Post #23 |
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ok I see what you guys mean. I'll post my character bio & artwork so you guys can see what goes through my twisted mind in DBZ. |
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| Inu no Taishō | Jul 1 2009, 05:09 PM Post #24 |
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Last time on Dragonball NB the nightmarens came to earth in search of the Dragonballs so they could wish back the original nightwalker! While on their search the invaders found Inu no Taishō meditating & tried to attack him. 3 out of the 8 nightmarens started shooting ki blast but they failed! Now Inu no Taishō & the others have a war to fight & it'll take everything that they've got to win! Chapter 17:The Super Saiyan 4's Are Born Somewhere on earth in the woods is Inu no Taishō meditating, thinking about how to finish what needs to be done. Inu no Taishō:Hm! from what I know 8 nightmarens & a saiyan have come to earth in search of the dragonballs to resurrect some nightwalker & they also plan to preform the saiyan genocide! Suddenly Onamuj comes into they forest where Inu no Taishō is & the 2 saiyans start to have a conversation! Inu no Taishō:So what do you think about the situation at hand Onamuj:Well so far I think it's sum cause they want to bring back their leader. Inu no Taishō:well think about it we had the original super saiyan but he was always berserk so he kill himself! Onamuj:Well that's different this guy that they want to bring back was some type of planet destroyer Inu no Taishō:So that helps us make our plan to destroy them how? Onamuj:Well I figure that if we start training we can be ready to fight Inu no Taishō:Bout that there's something that you need to know Onamuj:What Inu no Taishō:You'll know when the time comes Then Goku comes to the forest & joins in on the conversation Goku:Hey guys what are you talking about Inu no Taishō:Saving the earth Onamuj:So we can preserve the saiyan race Goku:But I thought we did that when we made the wish on our wives Inu no Taishō:That was just a small part Onamuj:Now these creatures from another dimension want the dragonballs Goku:For What Inu no Taishō:So they can bring back their leader & kill us Goku:Oh that's bull***** Goku Onamuj & Inu no Taishō leave the forest region to go to Kame House where the others are talking about how they will remember each other Inu no Taishō:What are you guys so scared for Bulma:Because they world is about to end & your just standing there smiling Nuwa:he's smirking for a reason Vegeta:What's so funny dog breath Inu no Taishō:The fact that there's 14 saiyans here & most of them don't want to save the planet that they reside on Gohan:You talk like you have a plan but you're scared yourself & stop smirking Inu no Taishō:The reason in me smirking is because I have my game set Vegeta:Then go through with it Goku:We've been in the forest so long cause we know how to beat them Onamuj:It's true Goten:What how Trunks:Yes please tell Inu no Taishō:Easy you 6 become super saiyan 4's Trunks:How is that possible Inu no Taishō:Blunts waves from Bulma's machine Bulma;I see now Vegeta:Since we wished you to be full blooded saiyans you can reach super saiyan 4 Onamuj:You think Vegeta:Ay shut up android Onamuj:I'm no longer a(n) android As Vegeta & Onamuj are fight Inu no Taishō teleports to capsule corp to get the blunts wave machine. Bulma then arrives in the machine to transform everyone in the group into super saiyan 4's! Inu no Taishō & Onamuj:Ok so who's first Gohan:I'll go first Trunks:I'm second Goten:I'll go third Bulma:Ok lets get this started Inu no Taishō teleports everyone to the islands where no-one is allowed! Bluma then gets inside the blunts wave machine to get the transformations started! Gohan then steps to the middle of the island to get done with the transformation process! Inu no Taishō:You ready kid Gohan:Yea I can take anything you can Onamuj:I don't think so Vegeta:he's not that strong Trunks:He's stronger than you Goten:Hahahahaha Goku:Now play nice Vegeta:Shut up Kakarot Gohan starts to gather his energy while Bulma powers up the machine & adjusts the settings for mystic Gohan Mystic Gohan:Bulma I'm ready fire the machine Bulma:Ok Trunks:Hey Inu no Taishō you think he can handle it Inu no Taishō:Yep Vegeta:He won't go through with it Onamuj:Shut the hell up already Goten & Trunks:Hahahaha Bluma fires the blunts waves at Mystic Gohan & he starts to trun into a Golden Great Ape! Mystic Gohan:Ah what the hell my body hurts Inu no Taishō:That's how this works Mystic Gohan:Ah I feel like my head bout's to explode Goku:Wow really I didn't feel that way Mystic Gohan:I'm about to go berserk Vegeta:Hm it's working Mystic Gohan:Aaahhhhh Onamuj:Hm...He's half way there Mystic Gohan:Aaahhhh Mystic Gohan:Aaahhhh....Rrraahhhhh Inu no Taishō:Now he transforms into the ape Great Ape Gohan:Rrrrraaaahhhhhh After Gohan transformed into the Golden Great Ape his body began to change once again! He started to transform into a super saiyan 4! Great Ape Gohan:Rrrraaaaahhhh Inu no Taishō:Now to see if gets control of himself Onamuj:He will Goku:You sure Trunks:Yep I'm positive Goten:He better Inu no Taishō:He will,call me when he's done transforming I'l be in another galaxy After 16 minutes Great Ape Gohan changes into a super saiyan 4 & then Trunks goes up to the stage!-------------->Flash Forward 52 minutes Goten then transforms from a Golden Great Ape into a super saiyan 4 & Inu no Taishō the reappears from the Kavorian Galaxy! Inu no Taishō:so you guys are done transforming huh? Goten:Yep Trunks:Yes Gohan:I Rock Suddenly one of the 5 remaining Nightmaren appears wanting to kill Gohan! SSJ4Gohan:Who the hell are you Tsukuyomi:My name's Tsukuyomi & I'm here to kill you SSJ4Gohan:I don't think you'll even put a mark on my face Tsukuyomi:Let's find out As Tsukuyomi & SSJ4Gohan begin to fight the sky turns jet black & flaming lighting flies through sky striking whatever randomly! 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| BattleMetal | Jul 1 2009, 08:14 PM Post #25 |
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Ok. This is set after GT right but like Goku hasnt left yet (or he has and has returned). This is bonkers to read  You bring back all of these villians and make them duke it out with Halo. A Super Saiyan 3 Turles, Nappa has a crack and even Brolly. Halo is Gokus older brother and can turn into a dog thing in the full moon and is somehow connected to this thing called the Dragoon Spirit that allows them when fused Hageta ( i think thats right) to turn into a blue dragon spirit. Heck i forgot about the fusion that occurs between Goku and Vegeta to become Gogeta which further fuses with Halo to become a Super Saiyan 4 being called Hageta. Andriod 18 fuses with another 18 to become Super 18 and is reunited with her brother Super 17. A wish is made to turn them into saiyans and they evolve into Super Saiyan 4s. They fight this clone thing called Xicor (i remember reading DB AF an i think this is where you came by this guy, cool) who is potentially Gokus son and is crazily super powerful. He beats the snot out of everyone. Pan turns into a Super Saiyan as well and gives it a go. Ive already mentioned on your style so im not going to again, its your way and your comfortable with it. Im just commenting on your actual story now. Cool Where did you come up with up with all this stuff? What inspired these ideas? do they just pop into your head or do you spend time thinking on what to do next? Its like playing paintball with landmines going off all the time and bomber planes roaring overhead, your being bombed from all directions. |
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http://dbzf.co.uk/topic/8040430/1/ Link to my DBZ fan-fic tale: Saiyans, Frieza, the Ginyu Force and other alien races and beings all chucked into the soup-pot for all out action and glory! http://dbzf.co.uk/topic/8129945/1/#new Link to a DBZ inspired story/ battle scenario that i did when i was 16 http://dbzf.co.uk/topic/8071554/1/#new Link to the Marvel/DC tale of the super-powered hereos and villians of both verses. Biggest heavy-hitters square off in an almight-free-for-all brawl! | |
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| Inu no Taishō | Jul 6 2009, 05:27 AM Post #26 |
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Yes you're correct about this being set after GT! In this Goku comes back early(4-5 years later)! Turles transforming into a(n) super saiyan 3 is actually due to him training in hell while Goku transformed during the Buu saga(so he looks like Goku Super Saiyan 3 just in Turles's saiyan armor)! The story around Xicor/Zaiko is still unknown to me on if he's actually Goku's crazy half god son or a(n) evil clone. So I sortta introduced him in as both. Halo's storyline is actually that of Inu no Tashio's cause Halo is Inu no Tashio's childhood imaginary friend(like how Afro-Samurai created Ninja-Ninja).So Halo is actually the dragon spirit cause him & Inu no Tashio have been seperated from the mind & when they finally meet again the dragon spirit that possessed Halo bonds the 2 together! I told you my friend when it comes to DBZ I have no control over my twied artistic mind! |
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